kamusta, Linny, I barely see your post and I am confused, Have you used HTML? probably you can use it next time and make it as an update, I think this needs a big emprovement
Kia Ora Linny it's Tyler here from Gilberthorpe school.linny the title sounds okay and it pulls people in but to get them hooked in to the story you need to right some more writing and improve it
Kia ora I'm Ethan H from Gilberthorpe school I liked the way you put some words and I looking forward to the story you are going to put down on the post. Did you think about putting some stuff of whats going to happen because there is not much words on you post. I've got a question what why did the day go wrong? But thats all I need to say so Bye!
Kia Ora Linny, It is Kareem from Te Ropu Manawaroa. The interesting part was the title. This brought me back to when I did writing about the Day It All Went Wrong too. I dont know if you forgot to put writing or this is the day it all went wrong. Why did you not add any writing because lots of people are commenting to put your writing you could read your comments to get some feedback.
What do you mean the day went wrong i saw nothing can you please put some more writing or a photo of the bad day because i see nothing please put some please. #MOREWRITING
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kamusta, Linny, I barely see your post and I am confused, Have you used HTML? probably you can use it next time and make it as an update, I think this needs a big emprovement
ReplyDeleteHola Linny, For some reason I cant see your post i can only see the title. But im sure its a great story!
ReplyDeletehi my name is Dylan i am in whakamanawa i dont even see the post maybe you should go back and improve it just a sajestion anyway
ReplyDeleteblog you later:)
Kia Ora Linny it's Tyler here from Gilberthorpe school.linny the title sounds okay and it pulls people in but to get them hooked in to the story you need to right some more writing and improve it
ReplyDeleteKia ora I'm Ethan H from Gilberthorpe school
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you put some words and I looking forward to the story you are going to put down on the post. Did you think about putting some stuff of whats going to happen because there is not much words on you post. I've got a question what why did the day go wrong? But thats all I need to say so Bye!
Kia Ora Linny, It is Kareem from Te Ropu Manawaroa.
ReplyDeleteThe interesting part was the title. This brought me back to when I did writing about the Day It All Went Wrong too. I dont know if you forgot to put writing or this is the day it all went wrong. Why did you not add any writing because lots of people are commenting to put your writing you could read your comments to get some feedback.
What do you mean the day went wrong i saw nothing can you please put some more writing or a photo of the bad day because i see nothing please put some please. #MOREWRITING
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